Dear Ms. Chituri,

Thank you for your exercise 2,
which I think is a great start. In fact, I would change this be keeping the
first and last sentences only, and removing all the other sentences, and then
making any additional changes you feel necessary to make your point. What you
want to do here is make this clear and concise, and keep it to one paragraph,
like this one:

For
the millions of people in India with cataract blindness, the Aravind Eye Care
System profitability provides diagnosis, treatment, and post-operative care,
which is 100% safe, has a greater than 90% chance of cure, is less than 1/5 of
the cost of comparable care, and is free for those who cannot afford to pay. Unlike government run hospitals, Aravind provides high-quality
cataract surgery in a professional and ethical manner, serving all patients
with dignity. Unlike those who do not receive quality surgery, patients are
able to return to productive lives.

But, I think you’re very nearly
there on this – just make it a little shorter. If you have any questions,
please feel free to post them back to me. I look forward to seeing your updated
exercise 2!

Best,

Katharine

Hi Ms. Chituri,



I just wanted to let encourage you to post your exercise 3, business
model, as soon as possible. As the exercise period ends Feb. 25, you
may want me to comment on it beforehand so you can make changes to it,
if you want. I'd need to receive your exercise by Feb. 22 at the latest
to provide comments, but of course, the sooner, the better!



Best,

Katharine